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Dana

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The constant vexation, and contemplation
The placation of my station in life
Create cravings, constant ravings
Frustration and strife
The yearnings, the burning
They break through my skin like a knife
The constant soul searching
Mind rattling and descisions
Roll like sound of dice
Clouded and shrouded my thoughts aren't so clear
Dependant, and defending
On my heart
but the blood still pumps fear
the loneliness, the heartache
the turmoil that looms
the only solace, that i find
still leads me back to you...
 
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very strong but too forceful

you leave no room for the imagination to explore as you bombard the reader with dark imagery
 

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Pretty good poem and a force intense mean with a full content point of great meaning. I loved it. Great work.:clap:willy_nilly:
 
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