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RibZ

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http://i102.photobucket.com/albums/m...Arts/flyer.jpg

Please check out and tell me what you think. The actual flier has a gradient (light purple on the top to darker purple/gray on the bottom) in the background. This makes the logo stand out and overlap the shapes on either side.
I need to know what works and what doesn't. Thanks.
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Hmm, first thoughts - as those are what might strike someone looking at it - first thoughts for me are that the white drop shadow box items don't stand out from the black on white text items around them.

The font and colouring for Mission Statement etc headings is nice and stands out as does the purple boxes - but they do tend to draw the eye away from the white drop shadow boxes. Not everything can be coloured I guess as everything would merge then but perhaps subtle shades on some things to bring them out more.

Just my tuppence worth :)
 
Far too busy, the different font types is distracting. What is the focus of the flyer? I'm assuming that it's for "Diversity Arts, LLC". But you'd never know that based on the logo placement, and the prominence that other information takes instead of the name of the company. The cursive script writing is difficult to read, and the accented text for the services and mission statement and all of that look way too cartoony and comic book style. It's super incoherent and disjointed.

My honest opinion is that you need to scrap that flyer and start from scratch following some sort of design guidelines.
 
Sometimes less is more :) you've got about a hundred different themes here, lots of different fonts and colours.... calm it down. The purple and blue headers are too difficult to read in my opinion and the italic script is almost as bad. There's nothing wrong with keeping it simple and still making it interesting.
 
I am no expert, but I agree with the other posters..

My first impression was:

- Diversity Arts LLC in rainbow colors.. No -No..
- Too many lines.. Too many rectangles...
- White background makes everything look washed out..
- Purple letters on blue is not a good combination, especially with the fonts you used..
- Too many different fonts..

My suggestions:

* Use two different fonts only.. and a maximum of three font sizes for the whole thing...
* Use a strong bold font for the name of business..
* Get rid of all the little rectangles..
* Group all the descriptions on lists, under their corresponding subtitle..

LOOK BELLOW... I'm just playing with things here, but you can get an idea...

***********************************
DIVERSITY ARTS LLC
***********************************
16 Harvard Court
Battle Creek, Mi 49017
616-836-3971

Look for us online at: http://www......... com/
Or find us on Facebook at: ........ Facebook.com
E-mail us at : diversityarts@mail.com

Mission Statement:
- - - - - - - -
- - - - - - -
- - - - - - - -

Services:
- - - - - - - -
- - - - - - -
- - - - - - -

Benefits:
- - - - - - - -
- - - - - - - -
- - - - - - - -

- You can arrange things in two or three columns...
- Be consistent and don't mix so many things, otherwise no one will want to read what you are trying to say...
- Take your time and try many different things before you settle on one..
- Remember that whatever you put on this, will have to go on your letterhead and other office materials, so think of something that is flexible...

- First thing I saw was a spelling error: "OUTRACH".. so make sure you have someone proofread your material..

Good luck to you with your business.
 
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