Here's a poem I wrote

[freakofnature]

Interrogation
Remember, remember that day in November
Extinguished an ember that burned in my night
The laughter did shatter amidst our blithe chatter
My well-hidden matter brought forth into light
Persistence, persistence wore down my resistance
Its hidden existence betrayed by your sight
I panicked, I panicked, I was getting quite frantic
In spite of my antics you drew the noose tight
I reversed it, dispersed it, but still you coerced it
I silently cursed it and tried to take flight
Confounded, dumbfounded and still I was hounded
My poor mind was pounded ‘til I ceased to fight
Oh weary, so weary, I could not think clearly
I acknowledged your theory and said you were right
Confusion, confusion, sprung from my allusion
What other conclusion did I think I’d incite?
Whatever I ever dared think to endeavor
I certainly never imagined this plight
My mystic linguistics proved to be fatalistic
It was characteristic, but I’ll be alright.

 

[Anie]

Glad you're sharing your work here, great stuff as usual!

 

[SilentSinz]

hey wonderful work, look forward to reading some more of your work!

 

[Jessica]

that's really good!!

 

[Dakota Jim]

Very good. Don't try to make sense of the rep I sent, the rep was intentional, the content a mistake. Thanks for your poem.

 

[NuckingFuts]

That was very nice. Thanks for sharing.

 

[freakofnature]

Thanks for your comments guys! That's probably one of my favorites of the poems I've written. It's nice to know other people like it too.

 

[Siphorous]

I love the flow, it hangs together beautifully and the style is very appealing. :thumbup

If I have a minor quibble - and it is very minor but wondered if you'd noticed this yourself - it's that the last but one line doesn't quite fit the flow of the rest of the piece. Last word has too many syllables. Minor though - rest of it is fantastic stuff!

 

[freakofnature]

So, I thought I'd post another poem I've written. Don't worry if you don't understand it. Sometimes I don't understand my mind either.


Freak
I sit and ponder my existence,
Buried deep within my mind.
What, pray tell, would make things make sense?
My life's a mystery to unwind.
Flights of fancy take me higher,
Over the rainbow in my eye.
The view from here I must admire.
It's so much brighter when I fly.
I linger here, I am not hasty,
Up on the roof, so unaware.
The cookies here are oh so tasty.
Ask me nice and I might share.
I'm here alone, there is no other.
At long long last I've been set free.
Now for grace to love another,
But I don't control my destiny.
And so I ponder my existence,
Buried deep within my mind.
What, pray tell, would make things make sense?
The answer I may never find

 

[MoonOwl]

Both are very cool!

 

[freakofnature]

MOAR!!!!!
I wrote this one a few years ago.


Stone Angel
Give nothing, take everything.
Yet it seems I always
Give everything and take nothing.
Give, give, give,
Always give.
I fear I have nothing to give.
Tangled up in the sweet embrace
Of words meant to placate,
The laughter lulls me,
Disarms me.
But laughter is hollow.
It means nothing.
Words tumble forth.
So many words.
Too many words.
Oh, treacherous exchange of words!
I am betrayed again
But I refuse to be conquered.
So I destroy you
Before you can destroy me.

 

[Anie]

I love your poetry!

 

[freakofnature]

Thanks, Anie. I write quite a bit but most of it is crap. I only post the "good" ones. :surrender

 

[Anie]

*sighs* I bet it's not crap...

 

[freakofnature]

This one was written based on recent events. It's untitled, which bothers me, but Anie is making me post it anyway. :mad


You spoke first
I was compelled to speak back
And so we spoke
Back and forth
Weaving our words
With delight and despair
And peering through the mud
An imagined clarity took shape
There was confidence
To boldly go where I had not gone before
I will never go there again

 

[Siphorous]

Clearing the air perchance?

 

[freakofnature]

Clearing the air perchance?

Are you suggesting a title? :unsure:



On a side note, this thread made it to two pages!!!! :willy_nilly:

 

[MMMMatilde]

hah. I love your poems

 

[freakofnature]

Thank you kindly for all the compliments. Now I shall add a little humour to this thread and share a few limericks.

Running The Race
I strive to win the great race
And it’s making me red in the face
I cannot run far
And I’d rather take car
And besides, I broke my shoelace

Mystery Stairs
Have you ever gone up the stairs
And been completely caught unawares?
Please clean your shoes
Before looking for clues
Keep an eye out for big shaggy bears

Rocket Science
People from Saturn aren’t too smart
And if you’re from Mars please don’t start
Those from Jupiter
Are usually stupider
While the ones from Venus are off the chart

On The Ball?
The other day I lost the ball
In the lunchroom or down the hall
I looked until dawn
But it was just gone
I just wish it wasn’t so small

My Origins
I come from outer space
It’s really a very nice place
Last year I learned
I was born on Saturn
That’s why I’m a basket case

Cold Blooded
One day I was feeling icy
So I thought I’d eat something spicy
I ate a lot
And got pretty hot
It made me a little too feisty

 

[freakofnature]

I'm going to take you guys back to the beginning of it all. This is the first poem I ever wrote. I wrote it as an English class assignment back when I was 14. It's still one of my favourites.

Before The Race
The horse stamps his feet
And tries to bolt,
But is held back.
He shifts nervously,
Anxious to be off.
Then, the last horse is in,
And there is that moment,
That split second
In which everything freezes,
When everything is silent
As the world holds its breath.
And then,
There is the startling sound of a bell
And the sudden bang of opened doors.
They all lunge forward,
Each one wanting to be the first one out.
The race is on.