freestyle poetry

[Dana]

Love is a battlefield
hearts are tattered
Wills never yeild
Love never heals
Wounds never sealed
Hearts torn
Like pages
Souls locked
like rusty cages
never to be revealed
solemnness is my weapon
shyness my defense
for love
past and present tense
I manifest my emotions
Get them shot down
Sniped in the night
Then your gone.
Like you were never a hindsight.

 

[Sparkey Duck]

That's good man! It flows really well.

The only thing for me is that the cadence is lost in the last line by too many syllables, a bit forced. Going from a couple of words per line builds up the speed and flow, building up to the longer lines near the end which still really flow.. Just that last line for me...

 

[Dana]

thanks

 

[Lizbeth19ph]

Nice poetry, Dana. Do you often compose poetry? I am a Poet myself and have published my book already. I love composing freestyle too but mine are longer ones but I do like Haiku too and other forms but I really am into modern poetry.

 

[MyDigitalpoint]

I believe freestyle poetry comes really from the heart and sensibility of the artist.

Great work Dana, and looking forward to read some of your own poetry Lizbeth

 

[writeletters]

That's good. Thanks for sharing it! I like freestyle poetry because it gives you a lot more freedom to do whatever you want with it. It doesn't restrict you and make you stay within limitations, which often annoys me.