Cruel war ( read plz no one is commenting)

[darklove]

Blood and gore
let it be no more
this cruel cruel war
will never end
the pain will keep going
my heart is still dying
my eyes and heart are crying
this fase in life
it's hurting and making us mad
but how can anyone be gald
whenn will this cruel cruel war end ?​

Brittany :confused
SORRY I KNOW IT SUCKS BUT I CANT THINK RIGHT NOW ​

 

[IntruderLS1]

While I don't share your point of view, I commend your writing.

Are you looking for comments to help make your writing more powerful, or looking for views on you views?

PS: It doesn't suck. Putting pen to paper isn't easy, and it sometimes takes 1000 attempts to polish it into a masterpiece. But even William started somewhere. Keep it up. :thumb:

 

[Bagel]

i'm probably nto the one to say htis..but make sure your proofread your spelling unless its intetional

its good.. you get your poitn across quite nicely, emotion is there and obvious (ina good way)

nice

 

[Kat]

I like it...very fitting right now...no matter what reasons...even tho some reasons are good...war is cruel

 

[Maritxu]

War is good for nothing apart from the political agendas of some politicians....
Love and Peace

Maria