Chemistry, Not Science

[BadBoy@TheWheel]

It's something quite plain, It's something interesting
It's dancing in the rain, it's time that's worth investing
It's sweaty plams and jitters, it's really quite unique
It's barefoot on the beach, dancing cheek to cheek
It's knowing what to say, and knowing how to say it
It's making someones day, no matter how you play it
It's nothing you can decipher, with pencil or a book
It's the way you look in love, it's in the way you look
Don't try to calculate it, it never will be proof
My heart can't hesitate, going through the roof
When two hearts combine, and form the sweet alliance
Is when you undertand, It's Chemistry
And nothing close to science.


Okay, I am an amateur, but I tried.

 

[livvy7678]

Thats gooid!!

 

[BadBoy@TheWheel]

Thats gooid!!

Oh stop it...You're too kind:unsure:

 

[Breath]

It's something quite plain, It's something interesting
It's dancing in the rain, it's time that's worth investing
It's sweaty palms and jitters, it's really quite unique
It's barefoot on the beach, dancing cheek to cheek
It's knowing what to say, and knowing how to say it
It's making someones day, no matter how you play it
It's nothing you can decipher, with pencil or a book
It's the way you look in love, it's in the way you look
Don't try to calculate it, it never will be proof
My heart can't hesitate, going through the roof
When two hearts combine, and form the sweet alliance[/COLOR]
Is when you undertand, It's Chemistry
And nothing close to science.

It's really quite good.
It has the element of imagery.
It has romance.
It's got unique descriptions.

 

[BadBoy@TheWheel]

But I am not sure if it's too choppy, I am not sure I like the flow...

 

[Kat]

i think its really good

 

[Mrs Behavin]

That is VERY good!

 

[SouthOfHeaven]

i thought it was vey good not choppy at all..

 

[BadBoy@TheWheel]

Thank you ladies

 

[SouthOfHeaven]

my pleasure