Poem written just before suicide

[TheNightShift]

This is from a book I am attempting to write (25,000 words so far) . The character who composes the poem - on a sheet of hotel notepaper is a middle aged European man let down by a young Asian girl

To Elvie,

My darling girl I loved you so


I wished we could be one


But now my dream can never be


For soon I will be gone


My time on Earth has come to pass


As to Eternity I go


Perhaps to God in Heaven


Or to Satan down below


You cannot know the pain I felt


As you went from my sight


Swallowed by the darkness


Of a sultry city night


From this Earth I must now escape


My spirit at last will be free


And you can seek your destiny,


Whilst nevermore thinking of me​

L xxxx​

 

[Jessica]

so sad

 

[freakofnature]

The font is super annoying. :ninja Nice poem but the rhythm on a few of the lines is a bit off.

 

[HottyToddyChick]

Very sad, but beautiful at the same time

 

[USF Sam]

God, that font is KILLING me...


To Elvie,

My darling girl I loved you so

I wished we could be one

But now my dream can never be

For soon I will be gone

My time on Earth has come to pass

As to Eternity I go

Perhaps to God in Heaven

Or to Satan down below

You cannot know the pain I felt

As you went from my sight

Swallowed by the darkness

Of a sultry city night

From this Earth I must now escape

My spirit at last will be free

And you can seek your destiny,

Whilst nevermore thinking of me​

L xxxx​