im a noob

[random guy 517]

hi, ppl. im only 13, so the poem might not be very good. (its free form if u didnt kno) Feel free to give criticism!!!
here goes nothing...

fire sparks
emotions flowing
feeds the flames

fire growing
outlet is gone
cannot stop
no escape

fire burning
all gone wrong
emotions out of control
life spirals down

fire killing
no hope left
truth then hits you...

there is only one way out.

 

[Bagel]

nice if i may say so welcome to the forum btw

 

[SilentEyz]

Very good work, age is never an issue with poetry, however with age your words may grow more powerful, but as seen by this, the talent is there.. very nice ..

 

[hhayes]

thats nice thanks for sharing

 

[bass_man1989]

I don't know crap about poetry but I thought that was damn good. Keep up the good work.

 

[random guy 517]

thanks for all the feedback...i appreciate it