I VOMIT SUCCESS

[Starmix]

I VOMIT SUCCESS

What shall I do?

To forget you

I failed, you succeeded

You mocked my failures

And left me with nothing

But heartaches and insults

I felt tormented, unwanted

You crushed my soul and emptied

My brain

But I stood where I fell

Never crawled back to the ground

I found myself in the midst of a disaster

And now, I finally succeeded my fame

Once put in shame

You asked me for a second chance

But never again will I be dumb!

You tempted me with your caress

Sorry, I cannot get back to you

Now that I vomit success.

 

[Urvashi]

The poem expresses a journey of overcoming humiliation and personal growth. It transitions from torment to triumph, highlighting resilience and empowerment. The metaphor of "vomiting success" powerfully conveys the release of past pain and the achievement of self-worth. However, the poem could benefit from more refined imagery and smoother flow, as some lines feel abrupt or repetitive.
It was a good reading, though

 

[eldavis]

This is a lovely poem, yes i vomit success.