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Goat Whisperer

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... I know I should put this in literature... but because of how slow the forum is here I don't think I'll get a response from there at all. I also think this is one of the best things I have ever written and I really want to share it with people!

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A minuscule leaf that drops from the trees
Upon it arrives a tiny little seed,
The seed floats back into the wind
Off on an adventure it begins

Through a small plane does this seed go
Following the wind wherever it may blow
Down in a lake the seed does plop,
In the water our seed cruises atop

Onto a bank our seed does arrive
Where a chirping bird finds it a snack
Then that bird flies aback
In to the forest of which it came

There our bird will be found a loss
By an agile wolf that snatched
Our little bird right out of the sky
That wolf will go on, into the cold winter mountains

Where he was a very quickly defeat
Not far up the ridge did he meet
A grotesque grizzly that did gobble him up
Then back down the forest he did schlep

Eventually he found a river bank
One that he crossed into a breezy plane
That lead to a rather large tree
Here he did find something rather curious

A porky old man, in plaid shirt, holding a stick
With a small yappy thing standing by his foot
Then when our young bear did try to run
He was simply shot down by a gun.
 
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... I know I should put this in literature... but because of how slow the forum is here I don't think I'll get a response from there at all. I also think this is one of the best things I have ever written and I really want to share it with people!

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A minuscule leaf that drops from the trees
Upon it arrives a tiny little seed,
The seed floats back into the wind
Off on an adventure it begins

Through a small plane does this seed go
Following the wind wherever it may blow
Down in a lake the seed does plop,
In the water our seed cruises atop

Onto a bank our seed does arrive
Where a chirping bird finds it a snack
Then that bird flies aback
In to the forest of which it came

There our bird will be found a loss
By an agile wolf that snatched
Our little bird right out of the sky
That wolf will go on, into the cold winter mountains

Where he was a very quickly defeat
Not far up the ridge did he meet
A grotesque grizzly that did gobble him up
Then back down the forest he did schlep

Eventually he found a river bank
One that he crossed into a breezy plane
That lead to a rather large tree
Here he did find something rather curious

A porky old man, in plaid shirt, holding a stick
With a small yappy thing standing by his foot
Then when our young bear did try to run
He was simply shot down by a gun.
That is absolutely fantastic!!Well done !!:clap:thumbup
 

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There are some small annoyances such as using the words "seed" at the beginning and "did" during one part of it, and maybe some parts could be polished but it's rather minor.

I like the ending a lot and I like what it's about and most of it is quite solid so thus, I like it!
 
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