does nobody care?

[random guy 517]

*please excuse foul language*

why are you here
are you just one of them
who treat my life like trash
throw me by the wayside
never to be respected
or cared for
or heard
just like they all do

who the fuck are you
to dictate my life
who the hell gave you that right

i will never be heard
i keep the demons bottled up inside
to wait for the chance
to eat me alive

my shrieks become whispers
i lose sight of the light
my pain is not realized
i wait for death...

does nobody care?

 

[elluko]

Critisism: Does nobody care?= Doesnt anybody care?/ Does anyone care?
"Does nobody care" sounds a bit off.

 

[random guy 517]

well, its poetry. grammar and all of that doesnt really matter too much, does it?

 

[andcuriouser]

well, its poetry. grammar and all of that doesnt really matter too much, does it?

Quite right. Poetry is more about flow than proper grammar.

I think it sounds good.

 

[lemon]

Quite right. Poetry is more about flow than proper grammar.

I think it sounds good.

really? swweeeet.

*thinks of a programming poem*

 

[SilentEyz]

Critisism: Does nobody care?= Doesnt anybody care?/ Does anyone care?
"Does nobody care" sounds a bit off.

very good thought though Luke, and it would flow with the change.. but the beauty of poetry is the writers words, as the writer hears it.

 

[SilentEyz]

I got tell ya Random, this one really hits home for me. Thanks for sharing it