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Anie

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Dismay lives in a nightmare more ghoulish than what reality brings, knowing a nightmarish world is futile. There is only chaos that exists in those walls that we bounded ourselves in our mind until we wake from a dream that we succumb to every night. What message does a nightmare bring?

People who exist in my nightmare are desensitized, unknowing, emotionless... they are mere puppets and my subconscious is the puppeteer controlling what actions they bring forth.

There is a strange man in the night that walks slowly, quietly breathing as he creepily stalks his vulnerable prey, a woman walking down a path unknowing of the strange man’s presence. His hunger... his sexual appetite grows... the smell of her perfume...the way her legs glow underneath a street lamp as she walks... he steadily gets closer... his hunger has to be filled. The woman keeps walking, she suddenly feels the strange man’s hand across her mouth, a strong grasp holds her and brings her into the shadows, a shrilled scream pierces the darkness like a knife.

Then we get to a scene of two men playing cards, a game of poker... they hear the screams, the shouts, a huge cry for help, the desperation of the voice in the darkness. They don’t bother moving or twitching in my nightmare as they hear the woman’s sounds, they knew the strange man. They know he isn’t to be crossed with in any form unless they want to be dead or knifed. They continue drinking their beer, they continue putting in chips as the pot grows higher. They turn on the radio so they don’t hear the woman’s plea in the night.

The only way that woman can be saved is by morning. The alarm goes off. She wakes from the nightmare.
 
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I should let you all know this is a form of expression, I never had that nightmare, I got inspiration from another resource :)
 

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Wow...OK... I got chills...

You really know how to paint an emotional picture.

I'm a bit rusty but it's fun to do, I really missed doing this for awhile. :)

You really have a way with words. I'd like to read more. :nod:

A lot of people say that about me. It gotten me out of shit a bunch of times before. :24:


Thank you for reading my work! :D
 

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Your writing pulls the reader right into your mood and the scene. That is a true talent. Please keep writing so that you may develop it. :)
 

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Anie that was pure awesomeness. I have done something similar but unfortunetly It was from Years ago. LSD is a bitch, ;) So yeah It was basically about a Man named Max. His Inner Spirit was taken by a dark force controlling his every movement. In the first scene It is him going to a subway station. He finds a security guard. The sound is silent. The security guard backs up against the cold steel wall. The scene continues with the camera (in this case It's a movie scene in my mind) pointed directly at the lamp on the guards table. The guard starts to speak and stutters very frequently. His voice is mute. The Man (Max) pulls out a pistol, points the pistol at the guard with the sights matched up with the guards frown. The man pulls the trigger and the screen fades to black then resumes with max (this is very similar to your piece) waking up in his bed. My literature usaully resides with drugs and violence. I like it to be dark and gritty, unfortunetly bunnies, rabbits, and sunshine doesn't work for me. I really enjoyed your work though. Maybe you should describe the female charecter more and you might even end up with a story for this. :D
 
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